(adsbygoogle = window.adsbygoogle || []).push({}); Just things i right when I feel abit emotional would like some feedback on what people think

1.With you by my side
i feel safe in the night.
never wanna feel the pain
of my heart braking inside.
cause I love miss you
just really wanna kiss you.
I miss you right now and
its kinda a big issue.
but when i meet you
it feels so good inside
i just wanna it to last
forever feel that blast
thats you in my life

2.We have a connection
filled with love and affection
Deep in my heart
I feel all the attention
We keep moving on the
love keeps me in suspension
without if i drop and
die with zero intention
Then i see you face
and i feel it inside
a warm fuzzy feeling
thats warm me up in the night

3.High on love when im with you its the best
But when you leave im high on rage instead
Afaid to retaliate incase i surge to the the ground
I dont know what will happen when people are around
So i stand tall thinking im the best
Not caring what happens to the rest
My heart glows like a shining light
Your my hope my personal light inside

4.I feel you inside like
a bullet in my hand gun
You always back me up
like my very own weapon
But you dont cause destruction
you build me up to fight
The trophy on my shelf
just dont matter
cause your by my side
my personal matter

its nice to have things like this on the forum and its good that you are sharing these

Nice poems mate

Thanks for sharing it :y:

A few spelling mistakes here and there BUT, great poems and i feel where they are coming from

very good keep it up ! (Y)

Yeah I used notepad lol and thanks mate glad people like them

Hang on, Who doesn't use notepad :love:

The subject matters are all a bit cliche, especially the first one, and the rhythm could be better, I would say the 3rd is the best, short an sweet with a nice little rhyme scheme. They all lack poetic technique, there are very few similes or metaphors, and little alliteration or assonance etc. Finally, your lexicon is pretty basic, try using some more complex diction to make your descriptions of emotions seem more vivid.

Caspa I had enough of english so now i have left school my grammar can waste away xD Thanks for the constructive feedback though