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I'm writing a war book that I'm going to call True Brotherhood. I haven't actually started writing the book at the moment but more focusing on writing out main events and plot points in simple form. This will be a guide for me when I finish so when I start writing it I will put much more detail into it and actually use correct grammar. Please give your opinion on this and maybe suggest a few things.

Here's my full book notes: (typed on my iPhone)

True Brotherhood (NF)

Main brothers: Sam and Travis

Note: research US military marine and navy seal training procedures

Note: research Congressional Medal of Honor

Note: make 4 seal team six names

Simple plot: Sam and Travis's father left them. The father took Travis and the mother kept Sam. Both of the brothers had no clue they had a brother. They both go to the military and end up in the same military academy. The establish and relationship and become best friends. They go through Green Baret training and skip through becoming a green baret and get offered to form aelite team known as Seal Team Six. Soon after President Obama gives Seal Team Six the intel of where Osama's hideout is. They kill*Osama Bin Laden. They assassinate the remaining powers (leaders and officers) of Al Queda. This causes the terrorist group, Al Queda, to lose it's structure and collapse. While undergoing the mission known as Blackfire where they kill Osama's terrorism organization officer, he was heavily guarded and after the mission was over the only members remaining of Seal Team Six was the two brothers.*Both of the brothers are awarded Congressional Medal of Honor for defeating Al Queda and refreshing peace in the US. At the funeral for Seal Team Six Travis vowed to never take part in any military related mission again after seeingthe horrible deaths of the rest of Seal Team Six. Travis retired from the Navy Seals and went to go live a peaceful life. Sam continued his time in the military and was offered a position of a field agent for the CIA. 5 years later Travis gets a phone call from the US government saying that his friend (brother) has been MIA for 2 years after undergoing a undercover operation to seek Russia nuclear missile silos. Travis joins the CIA and they brief him on the situation. The white Blackhawk lowers Travis down onto the snowy plain in Russia where Sam was last seen. Travis looks at his compass knowing the missile silos are directly north of him. His compass is frozen over. He looks to where the sun is rising and knows that is rises from the east. He faces the sun and looks to his left and goes forward. He heard a faint echoing beeping sound between the winding weather. He found the blinking red light and soon he fell through the snow into a underground hallway. The hallway was dark gray and seemed like a Russian military installation. Sam followed the hallway and found a huge Russian missile silo with a soviet Russia flag and a Spetznaz icon. He heard footsteps coming down the hall he looks down and saw a red dot on his chest. In seconds he was surrounded by Russian guards. One of them hit him in the head with the but of his AK 47. He awoke later infront of a screen. Travis was on the screen badly beaten and he yelled "SAM IM YOUR BROTHER" shortly after a powerful looking russian man shot him in the head with a desert eagle and he said not anymore and the video stream ended. Sam screamed and broke out of his chair and pulled a knife out of his back pocket slitting both guards throat. He threw the knife at the guard hitting him in head just before pressing the alarm. He grabbed the guards AK 47s and busted out of the door. He found on of their PDA and luckily there was a map to the base on there. He didn't see the words exit anywhere on the map so he found armory. As soon as he stepped out of the cell the alarms went off. He quickly ran towards the armory shooting his AK 47 Dandong behind him providing somewhat coverfire to keep the Russians behind the wall. He pulled out his lock decryptor and plugged it up to the armory lock. It quickly opened and dove in smashing the pad lock. He saw a stinger at first glance. Too bad stingers can only shoot if they have locked on the a projectile. He also noticed a mini Uav drone. He threw over one of the steel weapon racks and got behind it. He got the Uav drones laptop and hovered it near the ceiling and shot the stinger missile at it destroying the roof above him. Snow poured in covering him. to be continued...

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Both of the brothers had no clue they had a brother.

"SAM IM YOUR BROTHER"

Suggestion.Explain how it goes from.... To....That would really help the storyline.

This will be explained later in the book.

So Sam was captured for years and managed to break out and magically had a knife in his back pocket?

Too many COD references.

Travis was captured. Sam was the one who had a knife. The only CoD related thing in this is USA vs Russia but it's not going to be the main plot. This will be revealed later in the book.