Post: My english teacher gave me a project :v
01-16-2013, 02:30 AM #1
DinoFreak
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Originally posted by another user
Well to start off I was getting prepared for my Christmas vacation for some specific reasons.Mainly because there ain’t gonna be school and I can just relax be as lazy as possible. Another reason was because there aren’t gonna be some teachers sending us homework/projects to do. When December started I just went out as much as possible and hanged out with my other friends besides the ones on school. I also went on NextGenUpdate to see some threads and troll a bit. I was working to making money because if you don’t have money you don’t have SWAG. I spented Christmas eve on a friend’s house celebrating his birthday (wich was a couple of days earlier) but it was nice, I had a lot of SWAG. I did not wanted nothing for Christmas so I got the best gift ever a peace of SWAG, I don’t know why. After that I spented December 31th with my family on one of my mother’s best friend’s house in wich there were a lot of beer and everybody smooking. And I was just minding my own business eating some nice and tasty doritos. Once the year ended and the new year began… I went to the deadmau5 concert wich I partied til 2 am and it was pretty awesome, it was my first electro party and now all I think is party and well other stuff. But as the year started good sundently it did not start as well as I expected… my grandfather (my dad’s dad.) died on January 6st and before going to his funeral I told my self that I wasen’t gonna cry… seeing all those people crying made my throat very “shutted” as if I couldn’t breath. Once they lowered him down that’s when I could not hold it and bursted into tears as everybody was throwing flowers. And with this could say that I may or may not had the best vacation yet.
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01-16-2013, 04:24 AM #2
xd366
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Originally posted by another user
Well to start off I was getting prepared for my Christmas vacation for some specific reasons, mainly because there ain’t gonna (smh) isn't going to * be school and I can just relax and be as lazy as possible. Another reason was because there aren’t going* be some teachers sending us homework/projects to do. When December started I just went out as much as possible and hung* out with my other friends besides the ones on school. I also went on NextGenUpdate to see some threads and troll a bit. I was working to making money because if you don’t have money you don’t have SWAG. I spent* (but you have too much swag for spell check so its all good) Christmas eve at* a friend’s house celebrating his birthday (which* was a couple of days earlier) but it was nice, I had a lot of SWAG(i forgot this website is full of 12 year olds -__-). I did not want* nothing for Christmas so I got the best gift ever, a piece* of SWAG, I don’t know why. After that I spent* December 31th with my family at* one of my mother’s best friend’s house in which* there were a lot of beer and everybody smoking*. And I was just minding my own business eating some nice and tasty Doritos. Once the year ended and the new year began… I went to the deadmau5 concert which* I partied till 2 am and it was pretty awesome, it was my first electro party and now all I think is party and well other stuff. But as the year started good suddenly* it did not start as well as I expected… my grandfather (my dad’s dad.) died on January 6th* and before going to his funeral I told myself* that I wasn't* gonna cry… seeing all those people crying made my throat very “shutted” as if I couldn’t breath. Once they lowered him down that’s when I could not hold it and bursted into tears as everybody was throwing flowers. And with this could say that I may or may not had the best vacation yet.


so many grammar and spelling mistakes. i corrected your spelling, but there was just way too much grammar mistakes to correct.
01-16-2013, 04:28 AM #3
DinoFreak
I'm le back
Originally posted by xd366 View Post
So* many grammar and spelling mistakes. I* corrected your spelling, but there was just way too much grammar mistakes to correct.


This is a draft so, to shay.
01-16-2013, 04:33 AM #4
Kif
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I remember writing something similar to this, and I talked about smoking mad weed. It didn't end very well.

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