Originally posted by Depression
I really can't say I like this one at all, unfortunately...
There's really no depth overall, even though you really tried. All the effects are flat, which didn't help.
The focal is too centered in the tag, which killed your flow (that, and the focal is just standing straight up, no flow there whatsoever).
The text is distracting, it pulls my eyes away from the focal and hurts your flow even more.
Sorry I can't go in-depth, it's too late for me haha.