(adsbygoogle = window.adsbygoogle || []).push({}); Hey guys hope you like my video that i made im going to start uploading a lot now so please enjoy my first commentary !

songs are always better than commentary, but nice vid

You're joking, right? A song?

Honestly, your commentary is actually pretty good and your voice is fine, but you do say "umm" a lot but that's probably cause it was your 1st commentary and you were a little nervous.
Also, your quality sucks, you might want to get a PVR or BMI if your serious about this and also you need to turn your mic volume down a little bit so you don't hear the static and "popping" sounds.
Just a little constructive criticism for you.

thanks so much for feedback means a lot i do say um hehe i was nervous that will die off hehe and ya my qaulity does suck sadly i cant spend money on a pvr as i have to spend $120 on a minecraft server every month,i am also getting a new mic :d ty for feedback