It's not bad for your first montage, however I would try to put in some more impressive shots (I did see a few impressive ones) and try editing it to make it more interesting than just one clip after another.
Also, I don't know if it's something wrong with my internet, or if there really is no music, but if there isn't music I'd also consider adding music.
But as I said, it's not bad for your first ever quick-scoping montage, try watching some more well-known YouTubers quickscope montages and see the kinds of things they do, trick shots, collaterals, etc. and try to borrow some of that and even create your own unique shots and such.
P.S. Just for future reference, there's a section just for posting Montages and such, so next time post these in that section.