(adsbygoogle = window.adsbygoogle || []).push({}); Hi guys im 14 years old, i get grade C's in english im pretty s*** at it

well we have started doing sonnets and if you could help me out maybe by reading my first sonnet which took 10-15 mins

i will rep+ anyone who helps : )

MY 1ST SONNET xD

A) One sight bang im hooked like class A
B) Us talkings a brilliant pass time
A) Im not sure wherever u bring down my day
B) I hate it when conversation runs dry

C) I think we should cut to the chase
D) Will my love for you ever go away?
C) were perfect when near you i feel dazzed
D) If worse can get worser il be a stray

E) is my love stronger than words?
F) This is the best i can explian
E) I feel pinned down im not free like birds
F) My emotions come down like torrential rain

G) I think its all a dream cause its not the best
G) A pinch on the arm might wake me up from this mess.

Written by Ryan Poole
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First B on it has a mistake im sure it should be talking, second D should be worse again not worser first F should be explain.

That's pretty good work, you spelled explain wrong and ill has 2 l's. Also, remember to capitalize the first letter of each line.

It was rushed, thanks guys