(adsbygoogle = window.adsbygoogle || []).push({}); So, I have to write a lead sentence for journalism, and i don't really know if this is good enough. please give me your feedback please. BTW: the topic is the new iPods.. Here is what I have so far: Thanks for reading. Feedback is greatly appreciated!

I guess that can be your "thesis" like sentence. If you haven't already, expand your information on the new additions of these new iPod products. Maybe you can include how people have reacted when the news came out, or the reviews from people who have them if possible. Hope I helped

That is just the first sentence. I'm going to expand on it in the subsequent paragraphs.

Thumbs up for you having an education :y:
By the way, who are you writing this for?

On September 1st, at their annual music event in San Francisco, California Apple Inc. introduced their new iPod lineup for the holidays: the all new iPod touch, with 2 camera's, the new iPod nano with multitouch, and the new, smaller iPod shuffle......BREAKING NEWS! Russia just launched a nuclear missile towards the United States!
*2 hours later*
There is chaos everywhere and every major city has been destroyed! Due to the radiation, it has mutated animals and people! *Pans camera to the left* LOOK! RUN! ITS ZOMBIE SHARKS WITH LASERS ON THEIR HEADS! *Pans camera to the right* OH ****! ITS NAZY ZOMBIES FROM THE FUTURE!!! RUN!!!
*28 days later*
I managed to get away from the zombies....what is that?
OH SH--
*dead*
:carling:
I really couldn't help you but I could add something ridiculous. Sorry.

My journalism teacher. I need to have the lead done by tomorrow...

Good luck, and I hope you do well :bro: