My first rap!!!!!!!!!!!!!

04-25-2012, 08:18 PM #1

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plz be nice im jus starting any tips would help Happy

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04-25-2012, 08:32 PM #2

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Put it up on youtube?

04-25-2012, 10:03 PM #3

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Originally posted by lucasdude55

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plz be nice im jus starting any tips would help Happy

Don't make it sound forced

Use a beat

Don't use "fuck" in every line

Use bigger/better words

Don't be typical.

Best of luck to you!

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04-25-2012, 11:03 PM #4

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Use a beat :p

04-26-2012, 01:13 PM #5

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Says fuck to much, think your hated, need a better mic, needs a beat, needs ALOT of improvement. Use bigger words and try not to swear like a badass all the time, makes you look stupid.

04-27-2012, 03:38 AM #6

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It's fun:carling:

04-27-2012, 10:12 PM #7

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Originally posted by lucasdude55

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Honestly not very good

04-28-2012, 01:14 PM #8

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need a better flow

04-28-2012, 09:27 PM #9

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04-28-2012, 09:57 PM #10

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Get a better flow, use more syllables, longer lines, don't boast about yourself, use better vocab and deeper meanings. Winky Winky

I give it a 4/10