intro looks good. Is this your first attempt at it? What program are you using to create?
I think there are room for some improvements. It's missing some dynamic and flair. That's not a bad thing, but something to work after.
A gradient background will help give it some pop. Additionally if you can put some camera movement in there it will make it feel more 3d-ish. Hopefully that helps.
Keep making intros. It's fun. Just make sure you post in the correct section... video GFX section BTW.