Yeah Its a good 1st attempt however..
There is a couple of things i would suggest .
1. As Bapeboy Said: the face at the end is far to blurry, the face is the focal point and should always be seen and stand out.
2. to much red + white. IMO i think there is to much of it. you should try mixing up thr colours maybe add a bita blue to it?
If you have .PSD please edit it and re-post it.
And i see you've used my Tutorial

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