Cool I'm allowed to rate however I want, I'm not gonna change it I did rate it like a beginner in my opinion. I wasn't too harsh I just told you what was wrong with it. That's why you post it here is to get CC and I gave it to you so don't whine when I do.

Here I'll give you something to shoot for. His is simple yet effective and short and too the point. I watched an intro yesterday that was like 45 seconds, not that your's is but it's a tad long. He used a great design and effective text and font for the GFX portion. And he used a great transition. That's all you really need. His is a 9.5/10 so just something to shoot for. Look at that and you'll see what I mean about yours. I'm not trying to be mean or anything but it's your first time that you need the most help so I'm giving it too you.
[ame="https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=dZcT7x_Gu20&feature=related"]YouTube - Team [LAG] Custom New Intro[/ame]