i don't see the C4D lolwut >.>
Don't worry Taco I won't be rude like the rest:n:
If you look the C4D is the orange coloured flicks of light. its just not placed correctly.
Anyway I've seen the tutorial you used for this so I'm glad your on the right path. The render is blended better that your past tags so this is the way to go.
If you don't know what monotone means its basically using just two colours that are not black and white. For example in this case its blue and white.
Try working on the flow of your tag (google it) and never let anything cover the focals face.