some nice bitmap text with maybe a yellow stroke would do, take out the middle with 0% fill so its like the text u have but more precise, just try find a small font
LOL. Future, I gave it 0.5 of a higher rating than you. I think this will win SOTW hands down even at this point. Unless a surprise entry comes from like Matt.
The design progress via the layers and effects used have worked well with the main render and the c4d's but the text and two lines under the text ruins it :p 3/5