Color scheme doesn't fit well. Weird c4d's thrown together that don't mix right or blend into the BG. Text is in too generic of of a font and the white doesn't fit the rest of the piece or blend into the BG. Try using some clipping masks and erasing to sort that out. No flow, what little flow there was got lost among the text. The black line brush around the text doesn't fit the rest of the piece. This is a frequent problem with this piece. The elements don't go together right.