(adsbygoogle = window.adsbygoogle || []).push({}); This is the first draft of the first song I wrote. I wrote all the parts AND played all the parts!! I am 14 so don't be so hard about the criticism, this is my first song. Sorry about some of the drum fail. I don't play drums very well.

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PLEASE GUYS do not steal my hard work!! Tell me some feedback and I'll take it into consideration.

Thanks,
Mtx_FuRy (Dr. FuRy)

Which riff? I don't listen to Metallica so I had no clue I took one of their riffs O.o

It is old school Metallica, and only about 10 seconds or so.
But like I said, keep it up. It sounds pretty damn good considering your age. You'll only get better at it if you keep doing what you are doing.

Thanks for the constructive criticism! This recording is the unmixed version. I'm mixing it and it's taking a long time since I am not the expert at this stuff lol.

And yeah, music is my passion, I always find myself arranging songs for piano and guitar even on accident sometimes.

I've got a wicked good ear, and as such can be extremely critical of minor mistakes, so just wanted to point out a few things. Definitely not going to be like the douch that said it was worse than that berber twat.

Funny thing is I love electronica, and techno, but if hook doesn't kick in within about 15 or 20 seconds I generally won't listen to the entire track. Way too F'n critical sometimes lol...

My ear is still developing. My favorite music is rock from the 70's and 80's. Skynyrd, Zeppelin, GNR, Van Halen, that good stuff oh and can't forget Frampton.

Yeah, it felt that way. Have you listened to any Eric Johnson? That guy is an amazing guitarist. Always blown away when I see what he's able to do with a guitar.

Yeah I love his version of Cliffs of Dover from his live 1990 album. I can't remember the title of the album... It's something something Musicom... :/

Fresh men noob :p

So what I'm young? I'm more mature than people my age by a longshot.