(adsbygoogle = window.adsbygoogle || []).push({}); Well just to tell you in order for it to sound good you have to read it at a fast pace & read it like if it was a rap =D
I'm 16 & get my inspiration from 80s & 90s hip hop & underground.
Here's some bars I wrote yesterday, what you guys think?

Just sit back, relax & listen how I react on the track..

I be eatin niggas up like jaws
Followed you home, kicked down your door
Run up on that ass, put ur brain on the floor
Think about it before you step to me G
Watch yourself when you walk through my street
You'll get beat or feel the led from my heat, simply defeat.
Rush to high, don't try to enter my mental state, you'll break
with any fat rhymes that you make
A smooth groove that gives you contraction, back with a Mac 10, prepare for action..
I represent, the hostile & wild, a funky child my style flow like the Nile
My mic is burnin, back up don't touch ya
I'll crush ya, like the breakdown of Russia
Don't test, the lyrical style I possess, protect your chest from the best with the best, im flawless because many brothas make a mess, it's the stress that got me buckin like the rest.

Sometimes ill "battle" with one of my niggas you know just spittin some disses but neither of us are really geniuses, granted we do come up with some hot shit off the top of our domes.

As far as like actually trying to write a real rap yeah ive tried but im not very good at it, probably cause what id like to write is the intricate story telling raps which is prolly the hardest kinds.

Yo when the beef is on,
ive already got my heat drawn,
have my niggas posted in ya back side n front lawn
n we wont stop clappin till ya niggas is gone,
catch you slippin, then we dippin,
got love for the bloods but my niggas crippin
nigga you know im pimpin, cant hit it twice
its just like throwin dice which bitch ima hit tonight

^^something i just came up with , notice after the 3rd or 4th line its just horrible

I ain't gon front it was good in the beginning then @ the end it wasn't so good, but yea in school wen I'm in lunch we sometimes be spitting something disses or not. Mad times it's funny but sometimes them niggas spit some nasty shit. Yo go on my page listen to Made Niggaz by pac that's 1 of my favorite songs by him btw that's my favorite nigga to ever live.

Yea thats my problem ill come up with a couple hot lines ad after that im just like uuuummmmmmmm. Word made niggaz is a good ass pac song, always loved the beat since the first time i heard it.

Lmao you look like your trying to be Vanilla Ice :carling:

it's cool i guess.

After posting this on my page you know imma spit somthin i edited one of my other raps
All triples and quads and if you like 50 cent you wont like my last rhyme but **** it

Despite 9 clips
I hit ya with the right rhyme quick
You such a pussy you get taken out by a kite line bitch
So dont make me get the black gloves and black ski mask
My gat clap thats what happens when you see me blast
This aint no black jack free pass
I stack that cheese fast
And clap the back of your knee cap
Lock you in a room with toxic fumes and gas
Then pop ya soon and fast
Im the truth whore i blow your techs in two
Because i shoot more then ovechkin do
And i buck you heard this attackin
Like **** curtis jackson

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You started off pretty dope and i know what you mean i always wanna write raps that actually tell stories but its damn hard and i always battle with my buddy charron but hes unreal and battles at KOTD

I wanna hear this rapped :p

we should just all freestyle as well on this thread

pretty good shit man you gonna kick some more bars i got tonnes lined up

When this k round spit
You better lay down bitch
Because i spray rounds quick
And steal your 8 ounce brick
Pussies just kick wack flows
Il x you out like tic tac toe
Claimin you freestyle but you writ raps bro
Im just battling you and making it fun
I go out with a bang like i was dating a gun