(adsbygoogle = window.adsbygoogle || []).push({}); So I have to write an essay on the cons of the death penalty.


Can you guys send some links that will hopefully help me? I need 3 key points as to why the death penalty is bad. I'm thinking of using that the cost is too much, the chance of error, and I need one more.

I also need a catchy hook. I would usually be fine with doing this myself, but I am beyond tired and can't really think straight right now. Not asking for you guys to do my essay, just send me links with info that'll help with my essay, and possibly a strong hook.

I can't offer anything as of yet, but I will be more then happy to +rep you, and I'll pay more attention to your posts, which could lead to more +rep

I wrote up an essay on why I thought it was good and gave a page of why it is bad, (8 page essay).

I'd share with you but due to your post, I'd rather my writings stay in my hands or those I trust for purposes of possibly using it later.

(95%)

Try Death Penalty Pros and Cons

Yeah I understand. Do you have any ideas for a hook i could possibly use?

Here's what I wrote for my essay.

One of the most profound questions that have come about in modern times regards a punishment that is beyond that of sentencing someone to life in prison. The question itself is one of few that have people nearly split on just the concept alone and even more split when the rest of the factors are considered. In order to answer the question, one has to look far beyond one’s own personal views and come to an understanding of whether or not it is practical to punish someone with their life. That is the question; should there be a capital punishment for those who commit crimes, crimes like murder? The response is generally divided between yes or no with a small percentage being undecided. Their basis of opinion is determined on either a logical or an emotional scale. Questions that regard whether or it not it is morally acceptable or if it is against the constitution is often times asked. Other reasons ask whether it really is deterrence, whether there is a possibility of an irrevocable mistake; some may bring up the facts of its cost for the process of executing a single individual. Another main concern seems to be racial sways in the system and the quality of the attorney representing the person being accused and how the two may work its way against the defendant even if one is innocent. It is a tough question because of the many different factors and unless analyzed, the decision on whether or not it should occur is different in everybody though it should be considered.

Wow, I caught a mistake.. how did my teacher not catch that. I added an "is" where it shouldn't be.

Wow, that was really good. Here is what I have for my beginning, keep in mind I'm in grade 9 and my teacher hasn't taught us anything about essays yet.

What do you consider “justice”? Is it rotting in a 6 by 6 steel cell, where you can constantly think about your actions, and truly understand what you have done; or is it simply dying? In 35 U.S states, simply dying is considered justice for some of the most elusive crimes ever committed. No chance to think about what they have done. No chance to truly understand the effects there crime did. Just simply dying. Is that really considered justice, and is it really worth all the troubles?
In this essay, I will be exclusively talking about why the death penalty should be abolished in the United States. There are many key reasons as to why the death penalty should be abolished. Whether it is the enormous cost of the death penalty, or the very colossal misfortune of wrongfully executing someone, the death penalty should be permanently removed

Any improvements/tips? (Keep in mind that it has to be simplified a bit, since its a grade nine course)

Mine better be good, I'm in college studying Criminal Justice. Aha.

Since you're still learning, I'll let you write it with little correction as if I write up something for you, chances are you will take what I write and use it unconsciously and we don't want that as you won't learn.

Mistake 1: Anything less than 13, (0-12) should be spelled out.
Mistake 2: Never write "in this essay, I will be talking about". You want the reader to read and understand, not tell the reader.
Mistake 3: Don't say, "I believe". Give pros and cons and show support for what you believe in more than the con and hint it.

Although the death penalty follows the ideal concept of Just Deserts, an eye for an eye, it has too many flaws in it's system that makes it undesirable.

That hints that you dislike it. From your body paragraphs, you will then be able to show why it is you think so. By the end of the essay, they will know your point.

Don't worry, I wasn't the greatest writer and made the same mistakes as you; I was in honor English courses too. Aha.

Can you read my revised intro for me, and include tips as well? Note: I wrote this before you commented the above post. I still need to take out the I believe and other stuff.

What do you consider “justice”? Is it rotting in a 6 by 6 steel cell, where you can constantly think about your actions, and truly understand what you have done; or is it simply dying? In 35 U.S states, simply dying is considered justice for some of the most elusive crimes ever committed. No chance to think about what they have done. No chance to truly understand the effects their crime did. Just simply dying. Is that really considered justice, and is it really worth all the troubles?

In this essay, I will be exclusively talking about why the death penalty should be abolished in the United States. There are many key reasons as to why the death penalty should be abolished. Whether it is the enormous cost of the death penalty, or the very colossal misfortune of wrongfully executing someone, the death penalty should be permanently removed

What do you consider “justice”? Is justice rotting in a six by six steel cell where you constantly think about your actions or is it simply dying? Capital Punishment in 35 states is considered justice for some of the most elusive crimes ever committed. No chance to think about what they have done. No chance to truly understand the effects there crime did. Just simply dying. Is that really considered justice and is it really worth all the troubles? There are many key reasons as to why the death penalty should be abolished. Whether it is the enormous cost of the death penalty, or the very colossal misfortune of wrongfully executing someone the death penalty should be permanently removed.

Rough edit, would heavily consider revising.

Here's another paragraph, it refers to constitutionality. You could swing this into your favor:

The constitutionality of a situation is an important issue to pay attention to, especially when that issue relates to a person regarding their life and whether or not they will die within the regards of the eighth amendment. The eighth amendment states that any punishment that is deemed too mean or cruel, generally a severe punishment that does not meet the act in which the criminal committed, is against the law. The question whether or not the act of capital punishment is in violation of the constitution is commonly asked; the way that the law is worded is that cruel and unusual punishment is forbidden. There is no line that was drawn however when comparing a punishment to a crime. Historically, the way that executions worked were simple; this simplicity however did not mean efficient. Beheading, shooting lines and hanging were common forms of punishment for acts such as murder, not everyone however was put to death because of a heinous act. The punishments tended to be bloody, persons spilled their blood in front of an audience and with recent discovery; a person remained mentally alive after a beheading for a few seconds; persons who were shot at sometimes lived and suffered for several minutes until they bled to death and those who were hung didn’t have the luck of their neck snapping so they suffocated. The suffocation took from a matter of minutes to a quarter hour until the person passed out and died. The more recent form of execution was one created by accident; the electric chair. The method was to pass electricity through the body and the brain to kill the person. Simply by applying water to the head and placing the helmet on, the nerves would be shot and the person would die quickly by electrocution, often painless. There was a large room for error, if not enough water was placed, the convicted person would suffer tremendous pain. All of these are examples of what would easily be deemed as cruel and unusual, they had high margins of error. This is not the same with death by lethal injection. The original version of lethal injection included three types of injection and later converted to a single injection. According to a death penalty information website, “All states and the federal government use lethal injection as their primary method of execution. Some states use a three-drug protocol; others use a single-drug process. The three-drug protocol uses an anesthetic, followed by pancuronium bromide to paralyze the inmate and potassium chloride to stop the inmate's heart. The one-drug protocol uses a lethal dose of an anesthetic.” (Lethal Injection) The method now used today has a very small margin of error, the only notable issues and concerns is when a person violently moves their body; they stand the chance of tearing a vein or artery, which can cause massive pain and the possibility of a bleed-out. The chances of this occurring however are extremely minimal; one has a better chance of suffering from a paper cut. The method is now extremely efficient, a single injection; the person falls asleep, no pain, no realization of anything and then dies. The method is no different from putting down an animal. Should the death of a human be above that of an animal such as a dog? Life is life, how much is enough until we get to the point where it is impossible to as un-cruel as humanly possible, the method provided today is tens of thousands of times less cruel that what was done a couple hundred years ago. The only difference, people actually cheered. So, is the method today too cruel to use? Is it in violation of the constitution or should we just give those on death row the choice to be injected in a room in front of their loved ones and the people whose lives they ruined or to have their head cut off by thousands like how it used to be done.

^Catching more and more errors, I need to find someone to help proof read my crap before I turn it in. Sucks though, I did this essay in only a couple of days aha, still 95% is 95%.

All the stuff that I'm writing is a first draft with little to no brain power added to it. What you have written, astonishingly is considered grade 9 work. Of course I'n going to expand on that a bit, but most of it seems pretty good for a grade nine written essay. Thanks for your help, I'll definitely use that was an outline.

Grade 9? You don't write this in grade 9, it's the thought within it. This is right around junior to senior level writing which is equivalent to English 101.